Grammar and vocab needs dire edit
I guess I get the plot, and I'm trying really hard not to judge. The grammar needs a serious edit. There are too many mistakes to count, and I'm okay if there's a few, but this was a monstrous amount. The way it was written didn't give enough details, and the plot is going too fast. I recommend the author improves her vocabulary. She keeps using the same words over and over again, and it makes me bored and want to stop reading. However, the plot was interesting a sufficient amount to make me want to keep reading, despite the grammar mistakes, and vocab in need of changing. Again, I'm sorry if this is offensive in any way or goes beyond constructive criticism.
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