A Very Interesting Read
As I read through the first chapter, I started getting annoyed with the slow pace of the story. But eventually, I realised that I must enjoy this slow pace. All the details and descriptions made me feel different things. It made me enjoy the inane, mundane day to day affairs, and the sudden curveball the author threw at me when she suddenly started talking about humans and non-humans. I mean, I knew it was Sci-fi, but I expected some 'brace yourself' text. But I liked the suddenness of the introduction. Everything seemed rather human and mundane until that point.
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As far as writing goes, there were some grammatical errors here and there but nothing that would stop you from reading. The flow of the story could also be a little better with filling in gaps and stretching out some scenes. But then, it is up to the author's discretion. Overall, I really liked reading it. I read the story well. Good job, and don't stop writing!