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Linneus

I am a 42 year old mother of two boys. I love animals and nature. My favorite thing is to coach my kids in their sports along with my husband. We have two dogs and a great life.

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Great story

I love where this story is going (or where I think it is going as I've only gotten to the 14th chapter.) This story has a unique perspective, which I really like. It is very descriptive and paints a great picture for the reader. What is distracting is the run on sentences and word usage that might not be correct for the sentence structure. I would recommend going through the story paragraph per paragraph and really checking out punctuation placement and if the sentence is complete before moving on to the next sentence. Also the other thing I noticed in the beginning when the father and mother are there and Camille is getting beat up that I wasn't sure who was who as the mother's name was very similar. It might not be that way for everyone but I found it to be confusing and if her name was much different I think it would flow better for the reader.
I look forward to reading more and seeing where this story ends up. I love the characters and since I've just gotten to where the God is introduced, I'm curious to see what kind of God he is. I think this story overall is a great one and with some minor fixes in the grammar, it will read much smoother.

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First chapter

I've only gotten through the first chapter and I am intrigued by the story but you need to check your tenses of your verbs. Some examples:

Proofs versus proves
"A place have been prepared for you" should be has
"reply to your calling" should be call
"We stayed silence" should be silent
"you had gone to earth before." should be you have gone to earth before.

I think the story itself is a cool idea but the tenses are distracting. I will give a longer review on the story itself as I get into the meat of the story.

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LOVE!

Between Gates has really caught my attention. I am in chapter 11 so far but I had to write a review. The writing style is very smooth, the characters hold my attention, and some of the twists caught me off guard! I can't wait to continue reading this and find out what happens in the end. The more military aspect of the book I find a bit boring but that is just me and something I do not prefer. I think the execution of the book itself is amazing. I look forward to more chapters and seeing how these characters evolve.

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Cries of Love

I really love this story. The ending left me wanting more. I want to know more how their life went and that everyone was happy. The bit at the end that tied the beginning together was great. I found the first few chapters the transitions were a bit abrupt for me but this smoothed out after the 4th or 5th chapter. I do not know much about this culture but I found the author's perspective very intriguing. These characters are intriguing to me and I want to know more about them. I want to know what makes them tick. I felt such a strong reaction to Ash's love for her mother and not wanting to leave her yet knowing that she had to at some point for her own family and that she wasn't abandoning her like they felt the father did. I think this is a big dilemma for any child who is especially close to their parent and it was presented very well here. This author presents the internal struggles with a strong perspective.
I would have loved to seen more between Ash and Renu at that time they met. I was not expecting those two to meet up in such a benign way and I liked it. I am hoping for additional chapters or a book two!

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