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There was something about her. Maybe it was the way she moved, the way she talked, and the way she shined amidst a thousand faces. She was a queen. A queen in mourning- Queen of Hearts.

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best story ever

This is quite possibly the best story that I have ever read. the grammar is a problem but overall this is a good story if the grammar was fixed then it would become even better.

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Good try

This is a good try. The plot seems interesting but the grammar is horrible. There are several places where the words are together when there's supposed to be a space between them. Try using Grammarly it will help with the basics but won't fix all your problems. This is a great try.

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Timeless Classic

This is a timeless classic. It's great and made me want to know more about Angell and what happens next. There are grammar mistakes in the chapters that just hinder the story's greatness. You should look at the chapters more closely but overall this is a great book.

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longer

Cliffhangers are great but sometimes you just gotta make it longer. Your suspense is amazing that's what I like and hate the most about a story. It just leaves me wanting more and it also wants to make me scream at the author and tear my hair out. Great chapter though there are some grammar mistakes. I was also confused about which part goes first. Adding like part 1, part 2, etc will help.

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Good job

Even though this story has some grammar mistakes it is still great. The chapters seem believable and the emotion is just there. I haven't read hf in like 4 years but your story just reminded me of why I used to love hf. You should continue to write.

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Realistic

This story is realistic. It just seems to have all the problems that the world is going through and might go through. There were some barely noticeable grammar mistakes like you spelled capital wrong but it does not stop the story from being amazing. Overall this is a great start to a great story and I hope you continue o develop this.

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wow

So far this is really great you should continue to develop this.

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Need more

This book is great. The prologue got me from the start leaving me wanting more. Like seriously are the mystery woman and the mc meant go be together. This truly is a book that can go somewhere though there were some grammar mistakes they can easily be fixed and when are you going to update more. The questions, that need to be answered have me hooked to this book.

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Same

This is the same that I had for the other story. Remember the readers don't know the mc that well and it's your job as the author to get them hooked to the story

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Confused but great start

Okay, so I'm confused by the story and plot. Like the first two chapters are filters but they are confusing me. The problem might be because they are short and don't like to introduce the characters properly. Like is the mc male or female? What does the mc look like? How old is the mc? same goes for the villain. Also, there are some grammar mistakes in the story. But other than that the story is going in a good direction. What you really need to do is make the following chapters longer, introduce the characters a bit more, describe characters/settings, and fix the grammar/punctuation. I think that the story can get better with improvement/ practice.

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Great start

This is a great start to an equally great story. The plot is fine but don't you think that you should make the story a bit more intense I understand that it is only the first few chapters but hopefully the next chapters will be more intense that will add more to the story and how it reaches out to the readers. Best of luck in your start as a writer. In chapter 4 there's a bit of grammar error but other than that grammar is fine.

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good start

This story is off to a good start. You need to work on the grammar a little bit and I was confused about the story. Also, add a bit more to the summary so that readers can get a feel on what the story is about. The plot also needs to improve. I cannot wait to see where this story goes

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looks good

it looks good so far. there seem to be no errors and that's great. you have serious potential as a writer.

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so amazing

this book is really great so far. there are some grammar mistakes though.if those were fixed then the story would be even greater. I can't wait to read more of it.

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going somrwhere

I think that this story could go somewhere you just have to fix some grammar errors which are a lot. I think that this story could be great if you fixed the grammar.

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Awesome story

This story is really great I was sad when I finished chapter 11. It is a good story overall but you need to work on the grammar and there are some words that repeat in chapter 10 or 11.

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great direction

this story is great but the grammar needs some help. there only a few mistakes here and there. i cannot wait to see where this story goes.

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It has potential

I think that your story is great I really do. but it doesn't give me feeling like every time I read something I feel.
Your story needs to dig deeper I feel like if you went deeper with it than it would be a 5 out of 5 story. You have potential as a writer you just need to dig deeper. It is one of the most interesting things that I have ever read and I look forward to more of your work and growth as a writer.

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Potential

First off this story has potential. It was a wonderful read and has left me waiting for what happens next. There were several grammar mistakes but they can be fixed. There also seems to be little descriptions of characters and setting. I'm looking forward to what happens next.

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Need more

This story is amazing. There were like 1 to 2 grammar mistakes in the chapters but I left comments about them. The plot is going nicely though I do wish the chapters were longer. There seem to be little descriptions of Esme and Daniel. I love her character by the way.

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Hooked

This story is really great. In regards to grammar and punctuation, there are a few missing words and you didn't capitalize the start of a sentence. The flow is good but sometimes you just skip entire scenes. Like that part with Ryan. What happened? Why was Ryan there? Working on those and included those scenes. I was looking forward to the confrontation but you skipped it entirely hopefully you add it but great job overall.

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Amazing

This is truly amazing. Your writing style is great and the emotion is felt. I sometimes get confused between Luke and Lukas since the names are so similar maybe changing Luke's name would help. There are several grammar mistakes in the story and I can't get a description of the characters. What do they look like? How tall are they? You know the whole physical appearance. You should continue to write and I can't wait for the next update.

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lovin' it

You are a awesome writer.Write more books please

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Great

This is really great but there are several unnoticeable grammar mistakes in the story. You should check it out. But overall this was really great and you should continue to develop this.

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Better

You could do better with this story. You just need to fix the grammar and punctuation. You also need to stop putting different dialogue in the same paragraph. But great try so far

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Potential

This story has a lot of grammar mistakes. The plot is hard to follow. I'm confused about the mc's gender. The blurb is the most important part to gain a reader's interest in the story. Your blurb looks like a bunch of messed up sentences together. I believe this could improve it just needs better wording, better grammar, and a better plot. I know this may seem harsh but I want you to improve and I know how hard it is getting started. You should continue to develop and write this story, You'll get better with more practice.

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Going somewhere

This is really great though there are some grammar mistakes here and there. The concept is great though I don't read a romance that much I will continue to read this since I want to know what happens next.

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Great

This is really great and you should continue to work on your poems.

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wow

This is truly amazing. It has a lot of potential you should continue this. Though there are some grammar mistakes this is great.

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Wonderful

This is a great book though it could be better. In some chapters, you seem to add on other last minute details. There are several grammar mistakes throughout the story but it doesn't impact the story that much. It seems like you just added the attraction between Lance and Seth. In other chapters, it showed that Dialla only thought of Lance as a friend ihen you just added those feelings same with Seth. Overall this is great but it could improve.

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potential but stereotypical

This story has a lot of potential but its too much stereotypical. Like best friend leaves friend is upset friend gets bullied etc. The first 3 chapters made me feel like I was reading words. It didn't draw me in it didn't make me want to know what happened next. It just felt like a burden but chap 4 was really what wanted me to know more. It was actually doing something. Something was about to happen. I think that you should like introduce Yazmine after Dianna left. It will definitely bring moral support to Rose and help her deal with her bullies. Also, Rose and your other characters feel fake except for Yazmine. What does Rose want? Why do the bullies bully her and what are they trying to gain by bullying her. Also like combine chapters 2 and 3 together that will help. But this is a great first try and there's always room for improvement. You don't have to take my advice but I honestly think it will make the story better. There are also some grammar mistakes. Overall I can't wait to see where this goes update soon and best of luck.

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wow

This is just wow! I can't believe this. Chapter 5 was what got me really hooked to this. There are some grammar mistakes in the story but it's still great. If the grammar would be fixed then it would be even greater.

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love it

I love this poem and I agree with what Hayden d Linder said. You need to separate some lines but other than that this is a good poem

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Great start

This is a great start so far but there are some grammar mistakes. I was confused by the chapter because of all the mistakes. but great start

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Want to know more

This is a great story that had me from the beginning. It's unique and deals with a lot of issues in the world today which is something that I don't find in some books. There are a few grammar mistakes in the story. It kind of hinders with the greatness of the story but they can easily be fixed. I can't wait to see where this story goes.

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Great start

This is a great start your story is great so far and it's a rare book that you find. There are some grammar mistakes but they can be fixed. You should continue to develop this story and the cover that you have is great.

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Love the idea

I love the idea of the story that you have I am a huge fan of the series and I used to like harry potter when I was younger. So, you need to use capitalization when you are starting a new sentence and there a few grammar mistakes that can be easily fixed.

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Want to see more

I feel that this story has a lot of potential that is why it has a 3 out of three because this story really has something but you need to work with the grammar. try some grammar apps though that won't help much it can help a little bit. You need to clear up somethings in the story such as why does the pack bully her. Overall I think that this is a great story and I want to see more from it as you grow to become a writer. If you want me to give you another review when you are done with the mistakes and have more chapters let me know

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one of a kind

I have never before read a book such as yours. It truly is one of a kind and I can't wait to see where this goes. You should try to get it published. Maybe you should try for the inkitt novel contest. and continue to write this story

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great start

This is a great start. The story is great and there seem to be no grammar mistakes. Can't wait to see where this story leads. I don't know what happened but I did give you a review.

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great

This is a sad but great story. There are some grammar mistakes but they can be fixed. This truly very great can't wait to see Isabelle grow from this and realize that we can't control things like this.

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relate

This is such a great book. It hits all the points of a teenage girl from insecurities down to the looks. I think that a lot of people could relate to this book.

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Great book

This seems like a great book so far. It's stereotypical but it's also different at the same time. Best of luck with your writing career.

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good start

This is a great start but there are some grammar mistakes in the story and I am confused when that guy said that she left him for wealth.

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potential

This story has a serious amount of potential but the chapters are short and there are grammar mistakes in the story. If you fix these the story could become even better.

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Great book

This is a great book and it has a lot of potentials. There are no grammar mistakes. I don't mean to be rude or anything but I am pretty sure that you want to improve this story. These are only the first few chapters but in the upcoming ones can you make them more interesting? But this is a great book I can't wait to see where you go with it.

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interesting

This story is really interesting but there are some grammar mistakes. Based on the chapters that I have read so far I feel like you should write something that readers didn't expect that way they can become more hooked to the story. I can't wait to see where this story goes.

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this is wow

I am so hooked to this story you are an amazing writer I see no mistakes. my only question is when will you update

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good story

This is a really good story but there are some grammar errors.

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great

this story is really great. I's funny and a twist of fairytales. but there are several grammar mistakes in the story. I can't wait to see where this story goes.

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great story

This is a really great story but I am confused about it. what are you trying to say with the story? I don't understand it. Your descriptions are really great. it made me feel like I was right there.

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Not going somewhere

I think this story is not going anywhere. The chapters are good with a few grammar mistakes but the plot... it's not going anywhere. It just only seems like faint flashbacks instead of one big story. I think what could help with this is combing some chapters together. It will make the chapters longer and prepare the next chapters for more action. In books, something HAPPENS but with yours, nothing is happening. I get the fact she's trying to escape but add more obstacles. This is great so far continue to write.

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confusion

I am confused about this book. It's too fast paced for me. Like one moment he was in a crow's nest then he was on Pompey's ship. I think diving the sections will help. There were some grammar mistakes. Also for your other stories, you should add like part 1, part 2, etc because I have no idea what to read next and the order they go in.

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