Elena.R

Hi, my name is Elena. I become a big kid when it comes to any fantasy, supernatural, and romance. I love writing because it's like I'm bringing my dream alive in a book that everyone can enjoy.

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Their Screams Are Silent

The beginning of your story, where you grasp the attention of your readers was actually really good, but I feel that there should of been almost like an introduction paragraph to the characters. It was like you went straight into the story without really giving the characters a build up. When you give readers a more thorough build up of a character it is more likely they will remember their names throughout the story. Some readers may read a book and will get to the next couple of chapters and forget which character is which because their wasn't really enough backstory. Towards the end of the story I felt it was a little weak, but it still grasped the attention of your readers. It was mysterious and got the point across to your readers. I felt like you should of included a party scene with Delilah and Grayson and then later on Delilah going home and then finding out that her sister was taken by The Windigo. The chapter was still really good and attracted my attention but the chapter in a way was too short and there wasn't enough information given to the readers, basically too many questions. Like, "What stereotype is Delilah in High School?". I would work on transitions and maybe draw it out, putting more detail in so readers know where the characters are and the relationships/friendships they have in High School Overall the plot was really good and your story was pretty good as well. I like the character of Grayson, a humorous character. The relationship between Grayson and Delilah was clearly evident to the readers and it was quite cute. Readers could feel and envision the shyness Grayson felt in the one scene of your book where Delilah mentions him liking her. That was a good scene along with the ending which makes readers want to know more and want to read the next chapter. Keep up the good work and please don't take my constructive criticism to heart. I'm just trying to tell you my personal opinion, but if you love the book the way it is there is no need to change it. Have a terrific day and I look forward to reading more of your book.

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Overall this story was very well written and never strayed away from the plot. This story was vividly written for readers to be able to envision the events that were taking place with each character. The author wrote this story for readers to truly feel the feelings that the characters were going through. There is mystery that keeps the readers wanting more. Readers will try to make their own assumptions of what will happen to each character. This gives a supernatural appeal as well and gives you a creepy outlook on the medium. The author thoroughly wrote this chapter very well and I would recommend this story to anyone who enjoys mystery/suspense.

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Great Writers World

I've been reading this book in my spare time since I still owe people reviews for reviewing my own. Overall this book was really interesting and keeps readers engaged throughout the book. The main female character had a very versatile personality and you can tell she had her own morals and what was right and wrong in her head. I thoroughly enjoyed the aspects of her character, The only complaint that I had was when she would appear to be to easily gullible to the male characters. There were too many boys that she could have possibly become her love interest and there were not really any reasons why she even had an attraction to the two brothers. There needs to be more details to make it clear and give readers a gateway to what attracts her and why she appears to like someone, for example, Damian. That depiction was clear, but it ticked me off in the chapter where she initiates a kiss, but then pushes him away and runs because of "him being too old for her" or being her "mentor/teacher". But then again that added to the appeal of their relationship and the sense of playing hard to get in a way. The writing is well done when it comes to the family and it really shows as if it was a "real" family, I really enjoyed those brother and sister moments.

The plot of the story was not bad at all for a start. Certain things needed to be more clear and sometimes I wanted to have a different POV to help give me a better understanding of certain things that were unclear from Dialla's POV. The certain scene in your book about her father and how she got there in the first place was quite unclear, but I got over it. I would have enjoyed reading the details of how her father took her, etc. There needed to be more details in regards to powers/affinities that each student has. More background information on the school and how it came to be as well as a thorough understanding on why her father left which may add to the plot to help form the main character to a stronger person.

There were few punctuation and grammar issues and when there was it was not a big deal to continue reading. You just may have to reread certain chapters to make sure all the words flow properly. Following the present tense and past tense words. Your style of wrting is a breath of fresh air and you do not stick to the stereotypical ways that certain genres seem to stick to which I really enjoy.

This book I will definitely recommend to other readers because it is quite enjoyable and really makes myself want to continue reading. I was kind of upset when I hit the last chapter, but hopefully you continue to update and possibly write a second book because this could be a big hit in my eyes. You should continue writing and inspiring others with your work.

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