Daniel

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Marry me, Morgan Le Fay

I'm only just getting into it but I wanted to review this baaanger of a book, anyway.
I wish I was Morgan Le Fay. Your protagonist is awesome, I hope you can help me with my book, because as delighted as I am with it, the main character is the one who most worries me, and that just shouldn't be. Your writing style flows and it's punchy as, so a pleasure to read. I won't get bored with this one.
https://www.inkitt.com/stories/fantasy/261742/chapters/4
If you could give me some advice I'd consider marrying you, as well as Morgan
Dan

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A lovely start

Elisabeth something about this story hooked me, honestly. I would love to write another review when there are a few more chapters up, but for now I'll tell you what I can. I really like the way you write. Despite a few errors of vocabulary etcetera, (which everybody in the world makes) your style is a pleasure to read. The chapter is short and punchy and gives us a good idea of the world which you have created. I hope in the next one your main character can continue to grow :) Keep it up, never stop!

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Great Start!

The start of this book demonstrates Laura's writing ability. Her descriptive writing flows and is easy to read. It paints a wonderful picture of all that's going on. I gave the plot of the story a 5, even though I want to see where it goes, as this early on it's hard to know how it;s going to do develop. The characters, though often seen, are well developed in the beginning. I would make sure going forward that you find something to make your story unique to other similar representations of the issues in the book. If I were you I would write every day for the rest of my life, that's how beautiful your work is.
Dan

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Excellent!

I found the writing style to be excellent. The dialogue is very readable and believable, something that can be super hard to manage, and the characters are well developed. I liked the plot a lot but based on what publishers have told me, I would shorten the chapters, especially the first one, so as to rope the reader in. It's not hard to do without losing the essence of your story.
Congrats!
Dan

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