Coni_89

Arad

Structural Engineer, Product Engineer in Automotive Systems, Martial Artist, Horror book and movie fan.

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Damn good...again

All five short stories are very good in my oppinion. The first one is hilarious...Jesus! The second one was dark and mysterious. Third one was a little strange but more poetic and beautifully crafted. The fourth was brutal but many times life ain't better at all so it's ok. The last one contains some thruths about life which I can agree with.
Overall, you did a great job again. I couldn't wait to finish the stories in order to write this review. You are obviously talented and know very well what you are doing. Keep writing!

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An unforgiving ride through hell

First of all, don't read this if you are squeemish or don't tolerate violence because it has a truck-load of it. This is one of the reasons I like this book, no Twilight and sparkling vampires, bring on the psychos and the beasties! The story itself is solid, the supernatural element was weird at first but, by the middle and the end, it becomes a vital part of the story. Also, not everything gets explained. The author left some room for mystery too, which was a great idea in my oppinion. The writing style is interesting and the text flows well. The author did a great job of portraying the main character's madness through description, dialogue and monologues even.
Straight-up balls to the wall gorefest, dark and entertaining but not for the weak of heart.
Great job! Write more!

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Great poetry

Well written using a rich vocabulary and great style. I'm not much into poetry and, honestly, some of the words were foreign to me but overall I like your work. It clearly shows that you are a well read writer. Good job!

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It has potential

It starts really well but it begs for more. The premise is interesting and it kept me curious about how the events will unfold. The style was good, there were some artistic elements thrown in but the sentences were not over embellished. A great ending could make this story really stand out.
Good job!

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A star is rising

I'm definitely not into romance, I checked out your story out of curiosity and for learning purposes. All I can say is that it's a solid work so far. You've established a mistery in the beginning which is very good and then you are throwing your main character into more conflict, both physical and emotional which is also great.
I like how you can play with words, you've written some really nice/catchy sentences but not overly complicated or over embellished. This is for sure a strong point for you. It was also nice how you've interwoven the details, like the introduction of character names and places with the action. You didn't just state them plainly which might have been boring. At first I thought that Ocean was a cat :)). The dialogue flows nicely and seems natural.
The only thing I can identify as a minor problem, is the punctuation. I think that your comma usage is a little lacking both in normal sentences and in dialogues. These thing can be corrected easily with a beta reader software like Grammarly or Language Tool (use one because you'd be surprised about how many mistakes the eyes can't catch, I know it from experience). You can also google it up, there are only a few simple rules.
These tools will also help you catch words with typo's. You have a few of them as well. Only minor stuff and I suppose mostly unintentional.
So far, the story is great, even for a die hard horror fan like me. Keep working!

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Misterious slow burner

A little slow but interesting and misterious. I personally didn't understand the ending but the mistery kept me reading. Maybe giving some more answers in the end would have been better but that's just how I see it. Maybe I just couldn't pick up the message. I liked the writing style and the concept, however. I've learned a lot while reading this story. You should definately keep writing, you are talented!

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Great style

Not into poetry much but I like your writing style. I think that you have great potential. Ever thought about writing prose? With your writing style, I think you could write amazing stories given some good story ideas.
I wish you the best! Keep writing!

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Great style, great idea, a little confusing story.

The style is great and the plot is promising. For me, it was a bit fast with too many new things introduced too quickly. This might not be an issue for people who like fast-paced stories. Also, if most of this stuff gets explained as the story progresses, then I think that it will be all right.
Regarding punctuation, I would pay a little more attention to commas and maybe reduce the usage of "...". I would suggest using beta readers like Grammarly or Language Tool to correct possible punctuation or grammar mistakes. On the other hand, your knowledge of the English language is very good.
The dialogue seemed natural and flowing. The only thing I personally didn't like was that several lines of dialogue were written in the same paragraph block which is confusing for me.

Overall it's a great idea. It makes you read because it hooks you from the beginning and keeps you there with lots of open questions.
I wish you the best. Keep writing!

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Mindless - one hell of a ride

What I like the most about this story is it's fast pace, it hooks you right from the start. It kept me guessing until the end, it also gave me some ideas about future stories I'd like to write. Good job, keep on writing!

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