Aneli Defanif

I am a music composer as well as an author. An avid reader of fantasy and science fiction, I have a love to write stories which are well-crafted and focused on making people think.

Not following anyone yet

Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

A Great Book!

I am a historical fiction reader as well as many other genres. You book stood out amongst those genres and made me want to read more. This is a good story and the only thing I could recommend to change or edit is if you use a free grammar resource such as Grammarly.

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Skylar

I have a good sense of what is going on in your story. You have good direction. However, there is very little here for the content of your story and I do not know what your MC's like because you haven't introduced her.

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

A Thrilling Plot

This story has great potential and blazes with action. I can see it becoming a great hit!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

A Very Cool Story

You have quite the thriller here. A story of a man with dreams and visions telling him about the future, and the story of a brother who lives a sort of wild life. This is great chemistry and I like your sense of direction with the story and you excellent wrap-up at the end.

You use of the first person is very good though at times it drags, you could look at maybe cutting down your explanations and then jumping more into the action. All in all, though this story deserves 5 stars!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

NEAT

What an impressive book! I love sci-fi and this story is a really cool piece of work, and I very much enjoyed reading it. I hope that you keep writing and tell more stories in the future!

Taren is such an engaging character, and I look forward to reading more about him!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Elegant

Very well thought out. I like your attention to detail. Keep up the good work! Also, I would understanding on if your Matella is a male or female. Thanks, and have a great day!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Review

Hey,

Thank you for leaving a kind remark about my story, I'd like to return the favor. Your poetry is nice and you have good things to say in your work! I think it would be a nice little thing to be published.
Also, maybe look for any trouble spots with your grammar. I thought I saw one or two.
For any spots people miss with just being sometimes erring humans, I recommend Grammarly. I know this has helped me.

All in all, your work has great potential!

~Aneli

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

A Nice Touch

Very good touch to a genre which is swamped by tons of quickly written stories. It feels like this author has really taken the time to write a great novel.

Keep up the good work Kit!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

WoW

This is impressive work. I like your story of Government vs. Rebels sort of theme. The Liber is a creative good-guy force which is really cool. I really like your work!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Lovely

Wow a great read! A very captivating book. It feels like this is the best book a person could enjoy on a fall afternoon. I love your style! It’s a lovely blend of POVs and I highly recommend this book!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Beautiful

This is a wonderful story. Close to the heart and a great read for a fall afternoon. I totally recommend it!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Loved the Read

I think this is one of the sweetest, nicest stories I've read in a long while. It possesses character and deep and rich storytelling. I couldn't put it down!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Wow

This book had me hooked from the start. It looks all well and good, and then bam! You throw in the Scholar of Truth. I love your catalyst to kick off the and the many plot twists you have thrown in. Keep writing! I love your story!

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Neat

This book has promise, and it has a great plot. The story itself is very interesting with Galen and his quest in seeking out the artifact which was stolen and your use of description is admirable.

The reason I put only two stars down for your grammar and punctuation is that you use a third person omniscient voice in your writing and it made the story sort of rough and hard to follow. You have a great style, but you need to consider using less description and more character-driven emotions. One other thing: I think your description of Virian could be a little less focused on how she looks and more on her character. It would make a reader a little more interested in her.

All in all, you have great potential!

Happy writing!

~Aneli Defanif

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

Rise of the Dragon

Love this story! I hope you write more. I love stories about dragons and the kind of epic fantasy you are writing! This is a great read and I hope you continue to write especially about Kiren. He is one of my favorite characters.

Have a nice day!

~Aneli Defanif

Read the story now
Overall Rating
Plot
Writing Style
Grammar Punctuation

The Collision

Wow. This is a piece of fiction which moves a person. It's stunningly real and very direct. You have talent JMH Writer.
I hope this feedback encourages you.

~Aneli Defanif

Read the story now

No badges received yet

About Us:

Inkitt is the world’s first reader-powered book publisher, offering an online community for talented authors and book lovers. Write captivating stories, read enchanting novels, and we’ll publish the books you love the most based on crowd wisdom.