Chris Kelly

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Fascinating Plot!

This is a very unique plot! I’m definitely intrigued as to what is going to happen next. I’m normally not a big fan of romance stories but I’m enjoying this so far! I would work on your actual writing though, your sentences could really use some variation because it gets a little monotonous to read. Also I would recommend editing thoroughly to fix the grammar and syntax errors and please ease up on the ellipses—those little dots get quite distracting when used in excess. Your character development is lacking a little but this is the beginning of your story so I’m assuming there is more to come regarding that aspect. I hope this helps a little—please keep writing! I’m looking forward to reading more of your work!

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