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Good likable lead

I liked Jason. He's not your typical protagonist. The introduction to him is great. I felt empathy towards him and his ability to use his mind, not his brawn, to resolve the situation was a refreshing change to how sci-fi stories usually roll out.
The story strays into a telling rather than showing with some of the descriptions and Jason's inner monologue. It's something we all do, but this could do with some tidying up and it would really accelerate the quality of a solid story and a really likable character.

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