scarwals

Well...here goes nothing...I love reading and I fancy myself to be a 'good writer' :-)...hopefully the bubble doesn't burst! But...all in good time.

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Great read!

This is a really good read. The plot and writing style are both engaging. It is not seem like your standard, run of the mill mafia bad boy, broken girl story. The issues that the girl is facing are so very real! I am going to love finishing the story.

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love this!

I am loving how this story has started out! I agree with one of the other reviewers though....that you could make a lot more out of introducing all the fantastical creatures. But overall, a great story!

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Not my genre, but I still did not feel like giving up!

well...kudos to you :-). As I mentioned, fantasy is not really my genre....but I read through your story so far. The grammar and punctuation could do with a bit of work...but that's just a technicality! Look forward to seeing what how the plot develops.

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A good start

The first chapter is really great, and the dynamic narration continues through into the following chapters, with the parallel stories of Celeste and Elliot. There are some grammar / punctuation errors...which can be fixed easily when you go back to the story to edit.

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Amazingly well written

I have fallen in love with this story. The characters are incredibly engaging and real. You have gotten in each one's head and drawn them out so well! I cannot wait to see where this goes.
I should have given 4 stars for grammar and punctuation, as there are some issues, especially early on in the story...but I loved it too much to focus on that. It will be great if you could fix those though.

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This is such a good story!

I loved reading this story to the end! The plot is fantastic, as is the writing style. The only suggestion I would make is that sometimes the change in timelines (now and then) seems a bit too quick. And of course, a few typos/grammar issues.
But overall, it is a great read!

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It is good overall

The story, although cliche (and I live cliche 😊), started out well.
But Rose felt a bit inconsistent...sometimes too meek and sometimes too outspoken....with no obvious trigger.
The plot looked nice too. Again, the progression was inconsistent.
So, I would say that overall it was a fun read...but can certainly be improved 😊

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I am hooked!

I am really liking how this story is turning out. There is really very little to complain about :-)! But, if I were to pick one thing, it would be that the first few chapters seem to progress a tab too slow. However, because of the writing style, one is still inclined to keep reading!

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