Jonnathan Strawthorne

I love to write science, historical, alternate historical and apocalyptic fiction.

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A story worth the time.

It is an engaging and very intriguing story. As a YA Christian novel it will do very well with the readers as it develops the story line quickly and pulls the reader in with subtle varying plot lines. It is a testament to a young man's belief, faith and conviction that will reach out to young Christian's and touch their hearts. The story displays robust and deep qualities between the relationships where it is not hormones or desire alone but the qualities of truth, faithfulness, proper morality and the struggle between good and evil. I personally, although not a reader of the genre, found myself thinking of the overall issues being revealed, their final out come on the main character and the resulting effects on the suporting characters. The story is very well done and I applaud the author on a story deserving Inkitt's support.

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I can't forget the characters nor the story. I must finish it!

It is a fantastic story! It reminds me of Lock Stock and Two Smokin Barrels. I love the plot, the characters, the tension and the intrigue. It is an excellent novel. The ending is absolutely superb! A great twist to a great story.

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The art of creative writing starts with the first word.

It is a great story. I liked it from the start. Capturing with its anticipation and intrigue. I especially like the questions that continue to come up into my mind. I feel the plot moved a bit too fast. Character development needs more focus ie: more background on the main character however that is where a good developmental edit will come in handy. Also, it needs line editing. Perhaps use an editor located on upwork.com. They are inexpensive and quite helpful. Overall the plot, character, action and intrigue are well done. I give it four stars for story style/creative imagination and mystery. Keep up the good work.

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A Good Read

I am not a fantasy fan nor reader so the writer will need to take my review with a grain of salt. I like the storyline, the characters, and the mystery. It makes for a good Sunday afternoon reading session. A number of the words used I am not familiar with as I do not read fantasy novels however over a bit of time I was able to come to understand what they meant in the context of the story. The plot flowed smoothly pulling me along with its intrigue. One critical matter that I think needs attention is the head hopping manner in which the dialogue proceeds. The author moves from Red's pov to his inner self, and many times to either his friend's pov or supposed antagonist's pov all within one chapter. I think the story, especially for a novice fantasy reader like myself would appreciate if Red's inner voice remained silent. The constant dialogue within his mind takes away from the story, is confusing at times and makes me wonder if Red is schizophrenic. Perhaps the writer may want to consider using Red to explain to a new student how the school works, what different categories are involved and how the student moves up in the cycle. One last area to consider is the antagonist. Perhaps make the antagonist more evil or cunning or manipulative. Just some thoughts to help out.

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