This is a story that is not what I expected. There are technical and grammar mistakes that would need to be corrected. I would suggest to look over the story and edit it. Overall the story has a different feel to it. I liked how the girl never finished her game with someone else. I thought this would be more important in the book. Good read...but not for youngsters.Read the story now
I can feel like I am there in the story. The epilogue is great and I loved it because it showed what happened after, to the king and his sister. I would suggest going over the story and fixing the grammar as well as the formatting of the paragraphs. Overall it's a great story idea. Just needs a little tweaking.Read the story now
I loved how this story worked out and everything flowed, especially with the twists and turns that have happened in here. I loved this idea and the story's background went together with all of these characters. I would definitely read this one!Read the story now
From the beginning I knew it would be a page turner. This is a story that I would love to see out there in the world on book shelves. I so what to see what would happen to the characters next! A few technical things to look over, but overall a great story to read.Read the story now
I love this story and how easy it was to read. I would suggest going over the spelling and how the words are being used. Overall it was a great read and I will read the others too!Read the story now
This is a cool story and I like how the author describes what is happening. I did find it a little difficult when reading because the paragraphs are very large and there are multiple people speaking in one. The scene is great and the way the grandmother asks people to use the bathroom because the princess is coming, that was funny to me. I do say to give this story a shot.
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Interesting and great
How this story starts to how it ends s a page turner. You will want to know what is next. The punctuation and word choices needs some work. But overall the story is great. When it comes to demons and how people react to if we will fight, its a great story.Read the story now
I loved the entire story overall. Everything flowed and it was great how everything just fit together. The ideas of this story were unique and I just loved the story. Read it if you love dreams and adventure!Read the story now
I don't know what to say about this. It's incredible how you describe the deaths and why you need to kill. Why you would need to have something to bring home to feed what is there. Keep writing, expressing yourself because you do have a talent.Read the story now
This book was not what I expected, and that was a good thing. I liked how it flowed, some parts were funny. How you used different comparisons. A great read. I couldn't wait to see what would happen next! I loved what was said at the end of the story, how it all fit together.Read the story now
I loved the way the story was put together. You never knew how things were going to be, but there was something in it that showed you where it may be heading. I would suggest looking at where you have put the quotation marks in the story and those small things. But overall it was great.Read the story now
I love the story and the plot. How the characters acted towards each other, and the meaning behind the tortoise. It's true that it is better to experience something without speaking. I do suggest to edit the writing style, such as where quotes and other things are placed. But overall I loved it!Read the story now
Love the idea
This is one crazy story, but I liked it. The idea and concept of someone committing a crime every week and no one knows who, it kept you guessing. I would suggest fixing some of the grammar in this as well as separating parts of the story with a line or some kind of symbol so it doesn't look like everything is forced together. But this is a good read.Read the story now
I couldn't put this one down! The author looked up the information before he wrote it and did a great job of editing before putting it out there. I loved the background of the story and the ins and outs with what has happened, Great read!Read the story now
I loved this story and how everything flowed together. This author really looked at her work before she posted it. It shows us that we may question some aspects of our life and what happens. What goes on with the mother as she has her first child-just amazing. Definitely a great read!Read the story now
Great and fast read
It is a story that goes together nicely and the characters are ones that you would enjoy. Some people may relate to this one as well. Some things need to be looked over and tweaked. If the author does this, it will be a story that someone will want to have on their bookshelves.Read the story now
I love how topics from the first book showed in this one. What has happened and where the characters are going next-from the epilogue-shows that there is of course more to read and explore the rest of this series. I would look at some of the grammar/writing techniques, but overall I could not put this one down!Read the story now
Oh My Goodness
I loved the title of this story, and that is what got me hooked. But reading this from beginning to end, it was amazing. How the character changed from someone on two legs to an animal on four was great. The emotions on this story is one to be remembered. There are a few grammar things that need to be fixed, but overall it is a cute story.Read the story now
This is a great read if you want a new story about the supernatural! There are a few grammar issues that need to be worked on, but overall an excellent read. I loved how the dog Shadow came back in the end and made him happy. That was touching and this is a story that anyone should take a look at.Read the story now
I was captured by the title and the blurb. But as I read through it, this did make me want to keep reading and see what would happen. This is one that would be a great read. Just with a little bit of reviewing and fixing, it can be a great story.Read the story now
Lots of twists
I did feel emotions in this book when I was reading it. There were things that I, as a women, became mad at and what happened in this story. Because of what the character did and who he was. But this story is great. If a writer can bring out emotions in a reader, then that is someone who can definitely write a story.Read the story now
This is such a great and interesting story that I have read in a long time. The way the story flowed and the characters point of views were great. I would suggest re-reading it and fixing the grammar issues and some other little details. But overall a great story.Read the story now
I like the idea of how he talked about his life story and what he felt. What he has gone through, and all of this is a story he is telling to be questioned on how he will live his after life it seems. It's a great story and I loved how it flowed and all came together at the end.Read the story now
I didn't know what to expect when I first started reading this story. It was very interesting and I loved how you put it all together. What happened with the humans and how there is now a new world for these demons or what they may think of themselves. It was a great story.Read the story now
Hocked from the beginning
It is an interesting and different kind of story. If you like being taken into a new world of darkness and adventure, I would suggest you read this story. Some of the details are a little much, and to go back and review it. But after it all, it is a good story to check out.Read the story now
This is something that I thought would be different. But adding witches and these hooded figures was unexpected. I loved it! I would suggest fixing the ideas into paragraphs: if there is a new idea of course. But overall I think this was a great idea for a story. I hope there is more.Read the story now
The story was very interesting to read and I like what was created for the plot. I do suggest re-reading your story and seeing if you could fix the sentences to make them feel stronger. Overall, it is a story worth looking at.Read the story now
I love this story! I'm a supernatural kind of person, but the way this story's scenes are, how the writer portrays that the vampire's are the ones ruling over the humans. It was great! I can't wait to see what happens next and to see what the characters will go through.Read the story now
The author writes this story like he is there. The way everything is described, how nothing is overlooked when it comes to the stories of each characters lives is amazing. This is a great read and it was one that you would want to see how the story ends.Read the story now
Oh my god. I loved it! I read it so fast all the way through. I loved how it ended too. That was very unique and the story was great! I would suggest looking over some words and fixing like one or two, but the story was great. Keep writing because this was awesome.Read the story now
I liked how you made it like a poem. I understood everything and it flowed really well. I would suggest changing the abbreviations to words like ur to your or you're. Also to see what need to be capitalized in the beginning of the sentences. Overall it was an interesting and very good read. :)Read the story now
How you created the story and the characters is amazing.
In my opinion, I would look back at what you have and read over the sentences to make sure that there are no extra words and that it makes sense. Also I think that when you brought in Nick in the last chapter, to put 3 stars (***) to show that it is a new idea and someone else is speaking.
The story line sounds awesome and I would love to read more of it.