Their Screams Are Silent
The beginning of your story, where you grasp the attention of your readers was actually really good, but I feel that there should of been almost like an introduction paragraph to the characters. It was like you went straight into the story without really giving the characters a build up. When you give readers a more thorough build up of a character it is more likely they will remember their names throughout the story. Some readers may read a book and will get to the next couple of chapters and forget which character is which because their wasn't really enough backstory. Towards the end of the story I felt it was a little weak, but it still grasped the attention of your readers. It was mysterious and got the point across to your readers. I felt like you should of included a party scene with Delilah and Grayson and then later on Delilah going home and then finding out that her sister was taken by The Windigo. The chapter was still really good and attracted my attention but the chapter in a way was too short and there wasn't enough information given to the readers, basically too many questions. Like, "What stereotype is Delilah in High School?". I would work on transitions and maybe draw it out, putting more detail in so readers know where the characters are and the relationships/friendships they have in High School Overall the plot was really good and your story was pretty good as well. I like the character of Grayson, a humorous character. The relationship between Grayson and Delilah was clearly evident to the readers and it was quite cute. Readers could feel and envision the shyness Grayson felt in the one scene of your book where Delilah mentions him liking her. That was a good scene along with the ending which makes readers want to know more and want to read the next chapter. Keep up the good work and please don't take my constructive criticism to heart. I'm just trying to tell you my personal opinion, but if you love the book the way it is there is no need to change it. Have a terrific day and I look forward to reading more of your book.
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