A Soul Mate story
This is not my usual genre of story but I enjoyed it. I loved how complex your main character was as she went through a spectrum of emotions. I also really liked her best friends, one being her sister. They had such a deep connection and protected each other fiercely. As for the men in her life I thought you wrote the relationships very well. Giving us glimpses of the good and the bad. I thought your writing got better as the book progressed hence so did your work! I think this will appeal to a wide audience of those that love a good romance and a soul mate story.
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Now for the things to work on... There were a lot of mistakes in your work, from misused words, to punctuation errors, missing words and more. When I first put up my work I am embarrassed to say I didn't even have paragraphs it was exactly as it came out of my mind, no polish, no editing, nothing. I had a few people who wouldn't read my book because of these errors. I have learnt and am still learning about how big the editing side of writing a novel is. If there are mistakes it detracts from the beauty of your work. It also slows the reader down as they try to work out what you meant when a wrong word or missing word occurs. I have done over 10 editing runs and as you found there are still errors in my work. What I find works best is to read your work aloud it helps you catch the pesky little buggers. Also if you have a friend that's got a good eye for that kind of thing ask them to read it over for you. Others with fresh eyes always seem to see what we ourselves miss. I have a friend who is going over mine for me and I am hoping with her help I will find them all. I think you have loads of talent, I think this is a good story that just lacks the polish and sparkle that will really make it shine. So jump back into your story and hunt down those mistakes, that right now obscure some of the amazing story you have developed. I wish you all the best with your writing future which looks very bright!