John Liebert

Scottsdale

I'm a psychiatrist in Scottsdale, Arizona and specialize in diagnostics and psychopharmacology, but have been psychoanalytically trained also. I have written several textbooks.

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The Last Guardian

Interesting story told from point of view of teenager with mysteriously disrupted life. The challenges of a "not-bad" looking teenage girl starting all over in another town and big high school are told well. This reads fast and is refreshingly simple going. If had the time, I would probably have kept going to find out what was going to happen in the triangle of Cabin Boy and Marcus. This is a smart teenager who actually enjoys tests; so, some grammar is error and not her voice. I think this is going to be a good story and is told well in voice of an insecure teenage girl. Interested to find out what happens to her; so, that means it's a good story.

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Ropes

Good sea story, because right away you make the reader feel like he's sitting and listening to a very, very old salt. So, you want to know what it's like on those old ships, you want to listen. The language is real - at least as far as I can tell. That ability to tell a story in first person with an archaic and idiosyncratic language we no longer hear is a significant skill. Good story telling, and I think people will want to keep listening to find out where the rope takes you. The rope is an interesting thematic paradigm that you will have to stay with for a long time. That will be hard, but you probably figured that out.

I found one typo in the second chapter; otherwise, adjusting for the authentic language, it is well written.

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Calypso's Prophecy

I like the way you get the reader back many centuries. Opening, sitting in a serene living room and suddenly, 'BOOM', and your in the legendary world of pirates. I'm sure they did not brush their teeth and were a nasty bunch. But, as read along, you probably give them a morality of their own. Maybe they aren't total garbage, or you wouldn't be so interested in them. Good writing, in my opinion.

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Keepers Of Equalidor Book One

Great dialogue to create characters and educate too. I would have recommended this for my grandchildren 10 - 13, but then some language popped out at me that makes me think this is for adults only. Perhaps, that is a bit prudish, as they hear these words, but probably not appropriate for children and teenagers.

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Sateria and the Night Raiders

A page turner of pure lust and greed. There's a baby on the way. Maybe something good will come for all these corrupted people.. Good story and good story telling. Sex handled well - not too hot and not too cool. Maybe character description could be more unique and less two dimensional, but the physical descriptions don't detract from the characters themselves.

For the genre, good job. A quick read from LA to Chicago. That's what it is supposed to be in this genre.

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Wanting You

Although a seemingly simple narrative, this emotional conflict between a 15 year old girl and 19 year old guy who has been like a brother is hard to write. The author is succeeding. I would second the previous review and advise proofreading, because sometimes I cannot tell what is meant to be Mia's POV in her words and what is error.

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Love of My Life

This appears to be a soliloquy, which is fine. I think, however, it needs more structure. You can write just fine, and this is can be a great story about a very important topic. I am particularly interested, because I am a psychiatrist and do treat Indian women. I hope you keep writing and have direction, because I don't think a first person narrative is going be adequate. Fascinating and courageous on your part, revealing such intimate forces affecting mating in different cultures - particularly in different cultures thinking in English. Do finish this, because it is an important work in progress. I look forward to coming back and seeing more.

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The Other in Us

This is a high tempo history of the Czech resistance. The author uses multiple POVs that can be confusing, but so far her technique is working. I want to find out what's goin on here. Who is this German? What are his motives? Driven by lust or undercover in the resistance too?

Who informed on her?

Excellent suspense and I really do want to know what is going on here, and that is what counts in this contest. A potential winner IMO. Historical fiction too. I don't know much about the Nazi occupation of Czechoslovakia., and that is a bonus for reading this book.

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Waves Break on Unknown Shores

This story is written in the first person, and the narration is both skillful and effective. A few times I got lost and had to go back to get who was speaking; so, I advise making certain that it's easy to tell who's talking all the time. . This is really minor, however, because the author is skilled in this POV narration, moving back and fourth through the characters' lives and personality development. Maybe the title reveals the plot, because, like the waves, I don't know where the plot is evolving. Will the characters develop the plot as the title suggests, or does the author know how and where all these people are going to ultimately collide in life. I'm looking forward to find out, because certainly this is about more than a burglary. Somebody's going to get killed, and the authors have put a number of dangerous people on the stage with the narrator.

I'm going to come back after Chapter 6 and reconsider my ratings of plot and story, because I don't feel on track where this is going. That's not going to be a problem as long as these well developed characters struggle with fates and relationships from childhood in meaningful course in this seemingly tough seaside town,

The drama is really good, but it's way to early to tell where the bodies will be when the curtain drops. Excellent writing, character development and narration.

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Sky Chase

I hope I have this right as far as age group for whom you're writing. Being with grandchildren this holiday - kindergarten through 7th grade - I'm thinking it best for the younger reader. They have the imagination to fly with you in magical settings you portray well. Children need these books. There's much in this one to get them thinking - girls can have power and still depend on their fathers. Reading books could occupy them so they don't fight - or better yet, learn not to bug each other. I can't write in this fantasy world and glad someone like you can, because kids need to learn to read. In order to do that, they have to have books that engage them and their active imaginations, while keeping enough reality for them to relate to your fantasy world. I read Call of the Wild recently and thought; "this is for children?" Kids need more separation when trying to comprehend the harsh world we inhabit. They need the fantasy world like you create. I think you succeed in this. You probably know you need to do some editing when time allows.

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Rising Tide

This is a fantasy thriller; so, one has to read it with point of view of one's human traits. I think the author does a good job of moving the reader from human to the supernatural by gradually suspending disbelief. Not sure where this is going, but presumably disbelief will be suspended even more while still viewing the drama through somewhat interpersonal relations of humans.

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