Ghouls, Ghosts, Haunted Houses
I don't normally read horror, but I found this story and it sucked me in. I wanted to know who lived and who died, how they died, if they were ever going to get out of the house. It definitely had me on the edge of my seat. I couldn't stop reading. Although you can't really get attached to any of the characters, because you never know who is going to end up a victim next. Nobody is really safe. Usually there are a couple of characters who have "main character status" and that you can predict they are the ones who aren't going to die. But in this story, even though Victoria is the main voice, she could easily be the next victim.
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The suspense is great. So great that I wanted to read as fast as possible to find out what happened. And then...the ending. It was a little disappointing. I was a bit confused, though, and there's still some things left unanswered. I hope to read book two at some point to bring some conclusion to everything. Also, there were points when the point of view randomly skipped between characters, which could get a little confusing, but even so it was pretty easy to figure out who was speaking. I do kind of wish that they had spent more time trying to figure out how to get out of there and break the hold that the spirit had on them (is there a spell? a chant? maybe do an exorcism? a sacrifice?) rather than just sort of accepting their fate.
All in all, great job. You took a plot that has been done (teenagers spend the night in a haunted house) and still made it suspenseful. I enjoyed reading this story and look forward to book 2.