Phoebe Ng

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Blown Away

If I'd be honest, not many stories are based on South Asia and that's the first thing that caught my eye. Second, really loved how the plot is on a steady pace. I have yet to finish this book but I just couldn't wait to review it. It keeps the reader from stopping and it pulls us in for more as the drama unfolds. Really looking forward to finishing this book :)

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Amazing

Your book just draws me in with the blurb that you've written because it made me curious of who is 'he' and I think that's pretty rad. A good read and gotta hand it to ya, the details in the story are so well written; I can actually feel what the main character feels. Really looking forward to the next chapter!

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Very interesting

I like how you used colours as a way to sort of "describe" feelings. I actually have waited a long time for someone to write a novel like this because it's interesting and how I can feel the characters and what they go through in your story is just great. The fact that you didnt space the paragraphs bothered me a little but overall, a great book! Looking forward to your next work!

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Amazing

Love it. Just love it. I can't even describe the words for this story because it's just that good. I was hooked from the first chapter to the last chapter and it's 100% one of my favs in Inkitt. Keep up the great work! :)

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A little messy

I like how the plot firmly puts a strong, independent girl in her own place instead of having weak characters. But there are some parts of your book which are just a little confusing/messy for me. Like for the sound effects, maybe you could put it in italics and have the description behind it instead of going into another paragraph. I also noticed a few errors here and there. But criticism aside, I actually look forward on how you develop the book as I can see strong characters that you have put in the book. II hope i can see it grow :) Keep up the good work

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Intriguing

What I love about your story is that it actually makes the readers think about their own life as Jon goes on with his (and goes back) and I think that is truly amazing. This book really has potentials and I like how it also adds on to the fantasy genre. Good work :)

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Interesting read

It's really great book and I don't really read these kind of book as it involves military/politics but this one a book not to missed I like how you describe everything but the dialogues got a little confusing for me but overall, it's a good read :) Keep up the good work!

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An Interesting Read

This is a really great read and it just lures you in the moment when you start reading it. The characters are not the usual modern characters as I always read in other books so that's a good twist to it. I don't always read books from the Fantasy genre but this is definitely a worthy book to read :)

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One of the best

I'm going to be honest: fantasy isn't my one of my fav genres but Hleo just makes me feel that I'm actually in a real fantasy world. It is so intriguing and it got me hooked when i read the part where Ethan walks into the Patch. I am so amazed how detailed it is written and the author deserves to be known. Keep it up!

Please review my book too,I would really appreciate it! Thanks.

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