MtNaphtali

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Exciting

This was a really engaging read, and all of the characters reminded me of real people. Keep doing what you're doing, you could really go places!

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Rats in The Pipes

I love your writing style, it keeps me pulled in. I like that you do not mince your words. Also, I loved the names of your characters!

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Striking

From what I have read so far, this appears to be a pretty neat story (sorry I hate the word neat). I always love detailed descriptions, but just remember to make sure you don't overcrowd sentences with long words. Many times this can work well, but I feel that it certain cases less in more. There were a couple spots where I think the punctuation may have been flipped oddly or a coma was in the wrong place, but overall most of the grammar 'n stuff was on point. Wild story (in a great way)!

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Nice story

I think this is a really interesting take on your roots. I'd say just proofread your spelling, but it's a nice read despite that.

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good start

I think this could branch into I really interesting novel/short story, but I'm a bit confused about the plot. If this is just fantasy then I guess it's fine, but full body recoveries aren't possible (Like a brain transplant?). The descriptions are really vivid, but always remember to pace yourself. Overall, this has a lot of potential!

I'd appreciate some advice on my story too, if you wouldn't mind.
One last thing, why is this under scifi? Isn't that like aliens...

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Vivid

I have to say that from what I read so far, this is a beautiful story. Each scene has an intense depth to it through the long painted descriptions. I should definitely recommend this to a friend!

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