JenRandomlyWrites

When I am not writing, I am a single mother of two sweet little boys and an administrative assistant.

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Great Story!

It is a wonderful plot; just wished it was finished. I know it is a work in progress and I hope to see more of this book and future books to come. My only critique is the grammar and punctuation errors, which can easily be fixed through the editing process. Keep writing and once it's edited it would make a great book to be published! Can't wait to read the ending!

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An Amazing Story of Love and Betrayal

This is an amazing story of love and betrayal. All the twists and turns had me flying through the chapters. My only complaint is how the chapters were broken up. They were all pretty short and some extremely short, but don't get me wrong there is plenty of content. Overall it is a wonderfully written and beautiful constructed story. I hope it will get published some day! Hope to read more from you as well, maybe a sequel?

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AMAZING!

I love the way you made the story of Cinderella fit perfectly with Snow White. Beautifully done and all around great. Minor errors, but few and far between. Overall loved it and I hope it gets published soon!

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It's a good plot!

It has a good plot. The plot had me reading to the very end. Sadly like most books I do have complaints/opinions:

It seemed like Noelle is a little bit of a Mary-Sue in the sense that she is always right, is good at pretty much everything and people cling to her so quickly for not a lot of reason.
There were some pretty choppy time gaps that didn't seem to flow.
I was very thrown off when the last chapter was in Six's point of view since the rest of it was all in Noelle's.

I think with some work, this could be a great published book. Going to start reading the second book "Zero" very soon. I wish you the best of luck!

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Great Plot!

I loved the plot! Doing a story based on fairytales' descendants was a great idea. I loved the ending because I am a sap for happy endings. My only complaint is technical: missing actions, misuse of words, spelling, punctuation, etc. There were also some minor continuity errors that could easily be fixed. I think, if the author took a second look, or sat down with someone with more technical skills and fixed the errors, this would be a great story to be published.

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Couldn't stop reading! Amazing Plot!

The plot was amazing and I literally could not stop reading it. My only complaint is that after chapter 8 it seemed like it was not edited as much as before it (a lot more errors are present). Once it get's a final polish of editing, I believe this would be perfect and would be a shame if it never got published.

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Loved the Plot!

I loved the plot! I hated the ending but that is because I am a sap, but the ending is very realistic which makes the overall story good. You didn't make a generic he changes for her story; you told what normally happens in relationships like that. My only complaint is your technical writing skills, which can be fixed with editing. Overall a great piece of work and, with some editing, I hope to see this published.

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